My mother is a lovely woman and a really good person. She is short, about 1.55 metros tall. She has a long black stright hair. She can coock almost every kind of food, but she doesn't like cook any sea product, because of the smell. In professional speaking, she is a social asistant in Pudahuel and she loves his career.
She loves to help people in troubles or social risk. She visit a lot of elementary schools to find children that need some help.
Thats why my mother grants the nickname of "lovely"
She loves to help people in troubles or social risk. She visit a lot of elementary schools to find children that need some help.
Thats why my mother grants the nickname of "lovely"
Dear Andrés, I'm sure your mom is a very special woman. Regarding your text, I can tell that you did not do an editing process, since I could find a lot of grammar mistakes. One of the steps of writing a final draft of a paragraph to publish was to make sure it did not have any mistakes in the final version. With respect to the paragraph organization, I believe that the topic sentence is OK, but the concuding sentence is weak, and I'm missing background information about your mom.
ResponderEliminarFriend, no doubt your mother is a great woman, according to how you describe her, but I think that you were missing in your paragraph that you described your relationship between you and your mother to end with a more global conclusion.
ResponderEliminarThat's a good point Álvaro... there is no description of their personal relationship!
ResponderEliminarSorry Alvaro I did not see your comment, but I am going to keep in mind your words
ResponderEliminarRegards